Today we will review counter-claim and then complete peer-edits---If you do not have anything done you will work on that.

First, take notes on the basic format of an argument essay.
Second, watch the counter-claim/rebuttal video: Watch here where most of this is all explained.

These are the notes on counter-claim/rebuttal:
On the other hand, it has been argued that ________________________________ (counterclaim).

This point of view seems to make sense because _____________________(evidence/reasoning that supports the counter-claim)

However, ________________________________________(rebuttal--why is this weak? Give support through evidence!!!)

Therefore, ________________________________________(sum up why your claim is better/makes more sense)

Argument format and fishbowl round 2!

First, we will copy the BASIC argument format from the board.
Next, we will do round 2 of the fishbowl discussion (those on the outside switch to the inside and vice versa)
Third, complete the questions on the back (how you felt about the discussions)

Here are some fishbowl idea starters:

*par. 30-33: Explain/discuss the effects on "happiness" and perceived happiness

*par. 43 : Discuss the effect on sleep and related effects

*par. 38 :  Address the difference between the effect on girls and the effect on boys.

*par. 51 : Address the idea that kids are self-assessing their own issues caused by phones

Please take down the following notes and place in your synthesis argument section: Today we will work on: I. 4 and 1.5---change precis to MONDAY 9/23

In-text citations: Author-page style

MLA format follows the author-page method of in-text citation. This means that the author's last name and the page number(s) from which the quotation or paraphrase is taken must appear in the text.  The author's name may appear either in the sentence itself or in parentheses following the quotation or paraphrase, but the page number(s) should always appear in the parentheses, not in the text of your sentence.

For example:

1. Wordsworth stated that Romantic poetry was marked by a "spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings" (263). 

2. Romantic poetry is characterized by the "spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings" (Wordsworth 263).

3. Wordsworth extensively explored the role of emotion in the creative process (263). *paraphrase

NOT!!!-- On page 263, the author states that poetry was marked by a , "spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings" (Wordsworth).

"Smartphones" cont...

First, let's start with taking notes on argument: click here for reference and read more

Second, let's start reading at paragraph  36 and continue annotating.

Third, look at the worksheet on paraphrasing!

Copy and keep these in the Argumentation section of your binder:

The Aristotelian or classical argument is a style of argument developed by the famous Greek philosopher and rhetorician, Aristotle. In this style of argument, your goal as a writer is to convince your audience of something. The goal is to use a series of strategies to persuade your audience to adopt your side of the issue.

Basic outline of an argument:

1. Introduce your issue. By the end of your introduction, you should present your thesis--the point you're trying to prove before you get into details.
2. Present your case by explaining the issue in detail and why something must be done or a way of thinking is not working. This will take place over several paragraphs.
3. Address the opposition. Use a few paragraphs to explain the other side. Refute the opposition one point at a time.
4. Provide your proof. After you address the other side, you’ll want to provide clear evidence that your side is the best side--and acknowledges that you listened to the other side.
5. Present your conclusion. In your conclusion, you should remind your readers of your thesis and summarize the key points of your argument. If you are arguing for some kind of change, this is a good place to give your audience a call to action.

**Most good arguments contain the following modes of persuasion:

ethos-credibility

logos-logic

pathos-emotions

Have smartphones....cont...

Today we will:

• Begin by watching a video and taking some notes: Click here to watch again
• Continue reading and annotating the packet
• You can have the last few minutes of class to work on the vocabulary if you need it---and also the page on paraphrasing

Unit 1: Have Smartphones Destroyed a Generation?

Click here for the article: article
Click here for the unit worksheet: worksheet packet

Today we will:

• Begin reading the article and annotate
• Complete Tasks 1.1 and 1.2

Additional College Essay Help

Mrs. Caccamise's Top Ten List: College Essay Offenses
1. There is no narration: all "tell" and no "show"--no dialogue, no imagery, etc.
2. You describe an event, person, etc., but do not show the AMAZINGNESS of you!
3. The organization is ALL. OVER. THE. PLACE.-- no TRANSITIONS.
4. Gonna, Wanna.--these words don't exist.--I'm going to. I want to.
5. You say "that's why I want to be a _______" without explaining why.
6. You write about 2 topics without connecting them.
7. It is clear you did not put time or effort into your work.
8. You have no "voice"
9. Your verb tenses are all over the place--"I was" "I am"
10. There is no "hook" to grab your reader's attention, or last thought to wrap it up.

Today we will: 

1. Go over the top 10 list of common errors--don't make them!

2. Look at one more sample:) and analyze for its effectiveness (see questions below) 

3. Meet with me individually or hand in your outline/draft

Directions: The "RACE" strategy is not needed for these answers but you should restate the questions and use complete sentences.

• Do you feel it is a "good" college essay? Yes or no and why?
• What is the problem she encounters and how does she solve it?
• Do you feel like you learned about her personality--did it have voice?
• Was it memorable to you? why?
• Would you admit this person to your college? Why or why not?
• What suggestions would you give to this person to improve her essay?

College Essay Assignment

Assignment:  ----ADD ON: FIRST DRAFT DUE NO LATER THAN FRIDAY 9/20!!!
Your task: Write an essay of no more than 500-600 words in which you tell about a significant person, event, hobby or experience from your life that shows a quality or multiple qualities that would make you a valuable addition to a college or the deserving recipient of a scholarship. 

Step 1: Brainstorm
*Read some examples/idea generator to get the idea.
*Look for patterns in your web. Group similar ideas and events together.
*Still stuck? See me or ask your group for ideas.

Step 2: Draft
*Use "show" don't "tell" narration--use imagery!  
* Grab and engage the reader's attention in the intro 
*Explain what the topic reveals about you in the essay.
*The conclusion should be brief--nail down the meaning of the events described.

Step 3: Revise
*Have someone in your group read it and tell you what he/she thinks. Ask them if they can guess the qualities you are trying to convey--Did they get it right?

*Note: Spelling and grammar errors and fuzzy narration will make your essay memorable--in a bad way.

Today we will:

• Go over the college essay assignment
• I will model an idea generating web
• You will make your own idea web and discuss it with me
• look at the outline and DO YOUR BEST TO COMPLETE IT FOR HOMEWORK!!

College Essay Samples Day #2

• Today we will start class by viewing a video on the importance of the college essay.
• Second, we will review our questions/answers for the sample college essay "Loss of a Father" 
• When you are finished, we look at a second sample "Swimming". 
• You will complete an exit visa on "Swimming" or "Musical Movement"

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RACE--Short Answer Response Method ---COPY EVERYTHING IN RED ONLY!!!

Please take the following notes and place in the Reading/Writing Strategies section of your notebook (if you don't have it yet, save it until you do):

Short Answer Strategy: RACE- 
Restate-restate the question

Answer—answer the question (make sure you understand it first--ask if you aren't sure!)

Cite –give the best textual evidence possible to support your answer--not just any evidence (Think about my ESPN SportsCenter example)

Explain*—explain/analyze how your evidence supports the answer (the part we want to focus on more in 12th grade)

Important Notes**: 
1. These DO NOT have to be in this order.
2. Not all questions can be answered this way. Especially "right there" questions in which the answer is just a fact. 
example :  What city was Malcolm born in?

Today we will:
1. Take notes on the RACE question/answer strategy to receive full-credit on responses.
2. Read the sample college essay "Loss of a Father" as a group.
3. Decide as a class and discuss aloud: What the writer is trying to show about himself? How do we know? Are these characteristics that a college would be looking for?
4. As a class we will answer some questions together using the RACE strategy-- a model response (#1).
5. Answer the rest of the questions on a blank sheet of lined paper. Yes! You may copy any answers we did on the board. Place it in the box by the door for your class period.

Worksheet download: College Essay Examples (PLEASE DO NOT TAKE THE CLASSROOM COPY!)